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Okay, we need a lot of help here. I'll see if I can import some pages. | |||
I | [[User:Ultrasonicfan|Ultrasonicfan]] 21:41, 1 October 2010 (EDT) | ||
== | Someone should work on this. The page on Mario wiki is a lot tidier, better looking and easier to read. I would help but this is a bit too big for me, good luck. | ||
www.mariowiki.com/Adventure_Mode:_The_Subspace_Emissary | |||
==Cleanup== | |||
There is currently a cleanup tag for this page saying that it needs to be written like more informational than a storybook. I'd like to know how we can incorporate factual information. And besides, we should have a summary of the plot ''somewhere'' on this wiki. [[User talk:Ac2k|<font color="Red">'''''Ac2k'''''</font>]] 20:36, 6 March 2013 (EST) | |||
:Storybook refers to unnecessary details such as [http://www.ssbwiki.com/index.php?title=Adventure_Mode:_The_Subspace_Emissary&diff=457370&oldid=457366 pointless character descriptions and plot descriptions]. There is a difference between "Jack and Jill went to the farm" and "Jack, a young boy, and Jill, a young girl, went to the farm, which was away from the rest of the world." We would want to strive for the second one, but this is a Wiki, so if you wanted to know what Jack looked like, you'd click on the link to his page. In a similar fashion, if you wanted to know who Kirby was, you could click on his article. Long story short, remove unnecessary details if you see any more of it. <span style="font-family:Forte">[[User:Megatron1|<span style="color:maroon">Mega</span>]][[User talk:Megatron1|<span style="color:silver">Tron1</span>]][[User:Megatron1/Laughology|<span style="color:blue">XD</span>]]</span>[[File:Decepticon.png|19px]] 20:55, 6 March 2013 (EST) | |||
::Thanks! [[User:Ac2k|<span style="color: red;">'''Awesome'''</span>]] [[User talk:Ac2k|<span style="color: red;">'''Cardinal'''</span>]] [[Special:Contributions/Ac2k|<span style="color: red;">'''2000'''</span>]] 14:22, 9 March 2013 (EST) | |||
'''A year later...''' | |||
I just want to say I added {{[[Template:Cleanup|cleanup]]}} . Most readers, especially those of SmashWiki, are hardly going to sit through 20+ paragraphs of exposition. And the section is also poorly written. Some examples: | |||
*"''Inside the Halberd, out of a cardboard box disguise emerges Snake, who had infiltrated the Halberd much earlier for the probable reason that he is trying to combat the menace of the Subspace Army in their own battleship in his own way.''" | |||
*"''The Minister defiantly stands in the way of his brethren to stop them, but Ganondorf manually controls the enslaved R.O.B.s and have them shoot their former 'master', setting his cloak aflame.''" | |||
*"''Marth races to investigate whatever destructive plot is transpiring, but his fortress is besieged by the Subspace Army, forcing him to fight his way through repeated swarms of enemies until he gets to the grounds outside of the fortress.''" | |||
*"''Back in Skyworld, Pit helplessly watches as the Midair Stadium is consumed by the Subspace explosion. Just then, he is summoned by Palutena, who grants him the task of combating the Subspace menace and liberating the world.''" | |||
*"''On the Isle of Ancients, Samus is seen in her Zero Suit due to losing her Power Suit, and has infiltrated the floating island through a ventilator shaft and is now sneaking her way into the research facility areas, battling and defeating R.O.B. Squad minions along the way.''" | |||
*"'' Indeed, the original purpose of the detonation of so many Subspace Bombs was to open a rift between realms physically large enough to allow the Subspace Gunship through, while discarding the Subspace Bomb Factory at the Isle of Ancients in the process, as there would have been no further use for the factory once the Gunship enters the world.''" | |||
*"''This victory has not been without a heavy price, though: the sheer number of Subspace Bombs involved in the explosion that consumed the Isle of Ancients has prevented that area of space from ever returning to normal despite Subspace having been completely removed, so the Isle is gone forever, and an X-shaped mark of light remains in its place. As of now, R.O.B. will remain the last of his kind.''" | |||
Most of them are tiring to read (try reading some of these out loud) while others are filled with loaded words. Writing like this shouldn't go without the cleanup template, so it should stay there until drastic changes have been made. I know the writing [http://www.ssbwiki.com/index.php?title=Adventure_Mode:_The_Subspace_Emissary&diff=457370&oldid=457366 was much, much worse] (e.g. ''"And Wario, a bellicose thug with a penchant for mischief[...]"'' wtf am i reading) [[File:GreenMarioBrawlHead.png|15px]] [[User:Green Mario|<span style="font-family:Papyrus; color:#32CD32">Green</span>]] [[User talk:Green Mario|<span style="font-family:Papyrus;color:#FFA500">Mario</span>]] 17:27, 28 February 2014 (EST) | |||
Latest revision as of 18:31, February 28, 2014
Okay, we need a lot of help here. I'll see if I can import some pages. Ultrasonicfan 21:41, 1 October 2010 (EDT)
Someone should work on this. The page on Mario wiki is a lot tidier, better looking and easier to read. I would help but this is a bit too big for me, good luck. www.mariowiki.com/Adventure_Mode:_The_Subspace_Emissary
Cleanup[edit]
There is currently a cleanup tag for this page saying that it needs to be written like more informational than a storybook. I'd like to know how we can incorporate factual information. And besides, we should have a summary of the plot somewhere on this wiki. Ac2k 20:36, 6 March 2013 (EST)
- Storybook refers to unnecessary details such as pointless character descriptions and plot descriptions. There is a difference between "Jack and Jill went to the farm" and "Jack, a young boy, and Jill, a young girl, went to the farm, which was away from the rest of the world." We would want to strive for the second one, but this is a Wiki, so if you wanted to know what Jack looked like, you'd click on the link to his page. In a similar fashion, if you wanted to know who Kirby was, you could click on his article. Long story short, remove unnecessary details if you see any more of it. MegaTron1XD
20:55, 6 March 2013 (EST)
A year later...
I just want to say I added {{cleanup}} . Most readers, especially those of SmashWiki, are hardly going to sit through 20+ paragraphs of exposition. And the section is also poorly written. Some examples:
- "Inside the Halberd, out of a cardboard box disguise emerges Snake, who had infiltrated the Halberd much earlier for the probable reason that he is trying to combat the menace of the Subspace Army in their own battleship in his own way."
- "The Minister defiantly stands in the way of his brethren to stop them, but Ganondorf manually controls the enslaved R.O.B.s and have them shoot their former 'master', setting his cloak aflame."
- "Marth races to investigate whatever destructive plot is transpiring, but his fortress is besieged by the Subspace Army, forcing him to fight his way through repeated swarms of enemies until he gets to the grounds outside of the fortress."
- "Back in Skyworld, Pit helplessly watches as the Midair Stadium is consumed by the Subspace explosion. Just then, he is summoned by Palutena, who grants him the task of combating the Subspace menace and liberating the world."
- "On the Isle of Ancients, Samus is seen in her Zero Suit due to losing her Power Suit, and has infiltrated the floating island through a ventilator shaft and is now sneaking her way into the research facility areas, battling and defeating R.O.B. Squad minions along the way."
- " Indeed, the original purpose of the detonation of so many Subspace Bombs was to open a rift between realms physically large enough to allow the Subspace Gunship through, while discarding the Subspace Bomb Factory at the Isle of Ancients in the process, as there would have been no further use for the factory once the Gunship enters the world."
- "This victory has not been without a heavy price, though: the sheer number of Subspace Bombs involved in the explosion that consumed the Isle of Ancients has prevented that area of space from ever returning to normal despite Subspace having been completely removed, so the Isle is gone forever, and an X-shaped mark of light remains in its place. As of now, R.O.B. will remain the last of his kind."
Most of them are tiring to read (try reading some of these out loud) while others are filled with loaded words. Writing like this shouldn't go without the cleanup template, so it should stay there until drastic changes have been made. I know the writing was much, much worse (e.g. "And Wario, a bellicose thug with a penchant for mischief[...]" wtf am i reading) 
Green Mario 17:27, 28 February 2014 (EST)
